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Paper Heart

by ~CynicalRomantic

When I was little,
I drew a big heart
on pretty virgin paper.
The middle was hollow,
it was merely an outline.

When I was a bit older
I handed that drawing
to an unworthy boy,
who took it, and giggled,
and handed it right back.

A little older still
I gave it to a boy
who folded it carelessly
and stuck it in his back pocket.
It was crumpled when he gave it back to me.

I once handed that drawing
to a charming boy,
who promised to look after it.
Instead he cut it into little pieces
and scattered them on the floor.

I gathered them up, one by one,
and held them close to me.
But as much as I’d tried,
I didn’t have them all.
Some must have blown away in the breeze.

But then you appeared.
You took the little pieces from me
and taped them back together,
and you filled in those missing parts
with little bits of your own heart.

Then you did something
which made me stumble in surprise.
You took a big red crayon,
and you coloured that heart in,
before placing it in a frame and hanging it on your wall.

The big heart
that I drew when I was little
is now crumpled and frayed.
The paper is no longer virgin white.
But, you see,
it’s better than it ever was before;
because you coloured it in for me.
:iconcynicalromantic:
I have absolutely no idea where this came from. It is probably the least cynical thing I have ever written, and at a time when I am feeling very disillusioned. How very strange.

I really quite like this one, I'd love to know what you thing. =)
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:icongillham-san:
The tone is spot on here i think with a whimsical, child-like metaphor.
This is great stuff. (^_^)

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"To be an artist at all is like living in Switzerland during a world war."
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:iconcynicalromantic:
=D Thank you!!

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I hate to break this to you, but being a coward is not a legitimate career.
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:iconvivalafreak:
Oh boy. I like this--quite a really really lot.
I love the last few lines, it's a perfect ending. Good job!

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I don't break hearts; I just dent them. <3
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:iconcynicalromantic:
Thanks for the fave!! :glomps:

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I hate to break this to you, but being a coward is not a legitimate career.
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:iconvivalafreak:
No problem. =]

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I don't break hearts; I just dent them. <3
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:iconive-got-museum-fever:
dead sweet i really like it. the metaphore is rele clever and yet it comes over as being so simplistic which is a perfect tone for this piece, also the imagery is gorgeous.
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:iconcynicalromantic:
Thank you very much. =)

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I hate to break this to you, but being a coward is not a legitimate career.
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~wesbond Jun 12, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Cute is definitely the right word to describe this! This time around, the simplicity of the metaphor works perfectly. Very clever! I think line 4 of stanza 5 needs to be revised ("all them all" ??). Anyways this is great.
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:iconcynicalromantic:
Thank you very much, especially for pointing out the typo...woops!! =)

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~wesbond Jun 13, 2006  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcomed!
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